PRP - Agreement form Feedback

I sent a copy of my Agreement form to Debs who replied with some suggestions for changes to it which were:

What is your PRP research question?

• Perhaps- Has the viewers perception/audiovisual grammar changed or developed over time.? What are the effects of current edit production techniques and programming upon the viewer in terms of the audiovisual communication?

What is your PRP research topic?

• If you are looking at how it has changed where is the information about comparing the two coming from? Are you testing this on young and older people? I suggest that the attention span of youth is shortening and this could be a contributing factor to the development and style of editing. There may be others but here you compare. I think that you could carry out some of your own data gathering methods here.
  You should be more precise about where you are getting your info for research. Perhaps you look at mainstream and social based programming. It may also include more than the edit and look at issues such as frame size, fidelity, resolution and colour.
  i.e.have current delivery methods and techniques changed the perception of the viewer. This wider subject may give you more to discuss than merely the edit only.
  Kuleshov was such a long time ago has there been any advancement since he introduced “relationship” editing as you describe.