Location: Dad House
The differnt alcohol bottles / cans will be on the table to help show that the dads an alcoholic.
Location: Graveyard
Location: Nottingham Streets
Tuesday 24 February 2009
Location Stills
Last weekend i went for a walk with my girlfreind around Nottingham to looks for some locations, and these are the stills:
Location: Dad House
The differnt alcohol bottles / cans will be on the table to help show that the dads an alcoholic.
Location: Dad House
The differnt alcohol bottles / cans will be on the table to help show that the dads an alcoholic.
Problems Shoot dates
Since having completed my frameforge i have been having real problems managing to get a shoot date that both my main actors can make, I was thinking if there was anyway of filming it so that i could have one of them shoot some days and the other shoot parts another day but as they are both in every scene this was not really feasable. I got this problem because i left finding actors until after i had finished my script, so far doing this project i have learnt that you should start looking for actors as soon as you have your treatment done so that you can make sure you can get the actors for the days you want.
Wednesday 18 February 2009
Frame Forge third Day
I spent another 4 hours in the computer room today, and everything went smoothly again and i managed to finish my frame forge so heres the final version for "leaving Home":
Frame Forge Second Day
I went into uni yesterday and worked on my frame forge for about 4 and a half hours. Its quite an easy program to use and so i havent had any problems today, this is the updated AVI of it:
Thursday 12 February 2009
Frame Forge
Today was my first day on Frameforge, as in Danis lecture i didn't have any sound related questions i decided to use the time to go and start frame forge. I had slight problems to begin with but managed to get the first scene done. Here it is:
Storyboard Second Draft
I have recently redrawn my Storyboards up to about half way through my script. I was told by Debs (Lecturer) that they were ok but i have to do the writing on the computer as my handwriting is poor, and gave me the idea of possibly doing them digitally rather than by hand due to my lack of drawing ability! Here they are: (blogger wont let me upload pictures at the moment so will upload them when i can!)
Shane Meadows - "Somers Town" "This is England"
I have recently baught "Somers Town" by Shane Meadows it is about a 16 year old from Nottingham moving down to London, where he has no money and his only bag of belongings gets robbed from him on his first night there. He then becomes freinds with a young Polish boy and starts going and staying at his house and gets a feel for the hard work orientated Polish way of life. The whole film is in black and white to show the depression and unhappyness felt by the two boys, untill the very end where they go to france to see a girl that they both fancied and is then in colour as you see shots of the boys having great fun and obviously happy.
I feel that his style of film has been quite an inspiration for "leaving Home", This first came to me when i was thinking of film ideas that wouldn't be too studenty but would be interesting for me, for some reason "This is England" another film by Shane Meadows kept coming into my head, and then after watching "Somers Town" I thought that i would like my film to be filmed in a similar style to these. The main thing I like about them is the slighlty gritty camera style and with not too many bright colours, it makes it feel a bit more realistic and seems more like everyday life than the standard bright Hollywood movies, which means i find the viewer can relate more with it rather than just thinking its a film. I also get a sence of slightly amateur actors in it which again just makes if seem more realistic.
I feel that his style of film has been quite an inspiration for "leaving Home", This first came to me when i was thinking of film ideas that wouldn't be too studenty but would be interesting for me, for some reason "This is England" another film by Shane Meadows kept coming into my head, and then after watching "Somers Town" I thought that i would like my film to be filmed in a similar style to these. The main thing I like about them is the slighlty gritty camera style and with not too many bright colours, it makes it feel a bit more realistic and seems more like everyday life than the standard bright Hollywood movies, which means i find the viewer can relate more with it rather than just thinking its a film. I also get a sence of slightly amateur actors in it which again just makes if seem more realistic.
Monday 9 February 2009
Storyboard First Draft
I have recently started my first draft of my story board:
I then showed them to Debs (a lecturer) who said i had to show the direction of the face so the actors know which way they should be facing, To show direction e.g. if someone enteres the room put an arrow showing which way they are going and I had not realised that you had to literally show every shot from the Cameras perspective. I also found out the detail you had to write in the description about the shot such as writing the lines down from where till where in the script. Here are my first drafts:
Friday 6 February 2009
Semminar Production Designer
We read through a short script Jules had written and made this into a idea for film. we then came up ideas of what it would look like etc, we then had to go and make a design board of pictures that would help us explain the idea of the film to someone, the groups were someone doing props, someone doing make up, someone doing clothes and i did the location. Here is what my college was:
The main idea of the script was that there was a lady and man in a room the man was tied to a chair and the lady was sort of interrogating him about an item that was inside a briefcase. For our film the item inside was a cheese sandwich and the lady was from a rebel group that lived a remote place (top left picture) and the man was the Prime Minister of a futuristic city (top right) where everyone has stooped eating and only takes food supplement pills as they have got so obsessed with obesity and anorexia. The lady is in the government building (middle right picture) on the top floor in a room ( bottom 4 pictures) trying to get the prime minisar to eat this cheese sandwich. The remaining picture was just an idea for what the cars could look like.
Through doing this I've got a rough idea of what Production Designers have to do. I also have realised how one small prop can send an audiences mind going crazy. This was shown to us by the fact that as soon as we thought of a metal suitcase being in a film we all associated it with being a gangsta film.
The main idea of the script was that there was a lady and man in a room the man was tied to a chair and the lady was sort of interrogating him about an item that was inside a briefcase. For our film the item inside was a cheese sandwich and the lady was from a rebel group that lived a remote place (top left picture) and the man was the Prime Minister of a futuristic city (top right) where everyone has stooped eating and only takes food supplement pills as they have got so obsessed with obesity and anorexia. The lady is in the government building (middle right picture) on the top floor in a room ( bottom 4 pictures) trying to get the prime minisar to eat this cheese sandwich. The remaining picture was just an idea for what the cars could look like.Wednesday 4 February 2009
Sound Enhancing Film - Sound Effect
The Riddle
In this scene you watch a politician hang himself they do not show him actually hang himself but hear the sound of a rope being taught. This adds feeling to the scene and hits the audience harder than if you just saw him jump.
Sound Enhancing Film - Music
A Night at The Roxbury:
Through out this film the song "What is love" by Haddaway is used as part of the narrative, although to begin with it seems slightly more incidental. In this scene using birds singing gives the viewer the idea of it being a nice Summers day, with out having to actually use birds. This is the sort of idea i may like to use in my 6 minute film as i don't have a very large budget.
Through out this film the song "What is love" by Haddaway is used as part of the narrative, although to begin with it seems slightly more incidental. In this scene using birds singing gives the viewer the idea of it being a nice Summers day, with out having to actually use birds. This is the sort of idea i may like to use in my 6 minute film as i don't have a very large budget.
Tuesday 3 February 2009
Sound Enhancing Film - Sound Effect
Supperstar:
Here the sound used to enhance the film is a puking noise as one of the girls goes off screen, to portray her bulimic nature.
New Computer - bit of fun
Over christmas my girlfreinds dad choose some parts that i then paid for to make a sick new computer, just before the start of term i helped build it all up which was pretty interesting:
(pics to come later)
I also bought the new CS4 Production Premium package and decided to mess around a little bit with some snowboard footage i had taken last year and the differnt setings on premier pro and this is what i came up with:
(pics to come later)
I also bought the new CS4 Production Premium package and decided to mess around a little bit with some snowboard footage i had taken last year and the differnt setings on premier pro and this is what i came up with:
Monday 2 February 2009
Third Draft/ Final Copy of Script
“Leaving Home”
Script: Third Draft
Characters:
Older Brother: Dave (16)
Younger Brother: Garry (15)
Dad (38)
Shop Keeper (43)
Pick Pocket Victim (33)
Rude Boy (23)
Scene 1
Zoom out:
Int. – THE BROTHERS’ HOUSE – MORNING
The camera zooms out from a whiskey bottle to show Dave in the living room arguing with his Dad.
Dave
I can’t believe you forgot Garry’s Birthday again!
Camera changes to close up looking up towards the Dads Face as he slurs whilst trying to shout
Dad
Don’t you talk to me like that! I put the food on the table!
Camera switches to a close up of Dave’s face
Dave
No you don’t, your nothing! You’re a worthless alcoholic living on the dole!
Camera moves to a wide shot as the Dad fills with rage he dashes towards Dave and throws him to the floor and starts hitting him.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Garry runs into the room.
Garry
Stop Dad! Stop! I don’t care that you missed my birthday
At this the Dad flips out and turns his attention to Garry. The Dad picks up a knife. Tears start to form in Garry’s eyes.
Garry
Please….dad…please…don’t!
Meanwhile Dave has got up grabbed a pan and hits his dad with it.
Camera shows close up of Dave and Garry’s faces.
Dave
Come on Garry we have to get out of here!
Garry’s sobbing
Garry
Where..will..we..go?
Dave
I’m not too sure but anywhere is better than here.
Dave and Garry exit shot
Camera dips to black.
(Scene 1 Ends)
Scene 2
PAN :
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - GRAVEYARD - MORNING
At their mothers’ tombstone, Dave has his arm around Garry.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
The camera slowly pans in the whole grave yard to where Dave and Garry are standing, so you see the back of the grave that they are standing at and their top half of their body
Garry
I wish mum was still alive
Dave
Me too, you know I’m always there for you
Garry whimpering
Dave
Come on Garry it won’t always be this bad.
Garry looks at dave
Dave
I promise
Garry
When? You always say it that but when!?
Dave
Soon, I have a feeling but for now we have to try and get some money for food nd shit.
Camera zooms out.
Show a variety of quick shots of the two boys begging on the street and practicing to pick pocket.
(Scene 2 Ends)
Scene 3
ZOOM IN:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - PLAYGROUND - MIDDAY
The boys are sitting next to each other on two swings
It’s a grey day you can hear cars
The camera is facing them both sitting on the swings
Garry
What are we going to do? I’m hungry!
Dave
We have to just try and do it, just go for it!
Camera fades out.
(Scene 3 Ends)
Scene 4
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREETS – AFTERNOON
The boys are going to try and pick pocket someone.
Dave
I’m gonna go try on that guy.
Dave nods towards someone that has just used the cash point. The guy looks up as Dave brushes past him.
Dad
Dave?! Come back here!!
A chase begins
Show some fast shots of Dave being chased by his dad.
Fast exhilarating music
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Dave gets away.
Dad
What have I done?
(Scene 4 Ends)
Scene 5
ZOOM IN:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - PLAYGROUND - MIDDAY
The boys are sitting in the park again
It’s a grey day you can hear cars
Dave
Shit, I almost tryed to mug Dad. This is fucked up
Garry
Think of everything he has done to us.
Dave
Ye but he’s still our dad
Dave stands up and paces for a few seconds
Garry
Ye I know… but how are we gonna get money? How are we going to eat?
Dave
I’m trying to think, let me think for a minute.
Dave stands up and paces for a few seconds
Dave
I’ve got it
The camera zooms out as Dave explains the plan
(Scene 5 Ends)
Scene 6
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREETS – AFTERNOON
The boys are walking along the street when a man walks out of a shop
Pickpocket Victim
Fuck Off! I don’t owe you anything
The man pushes dave out the way.
Pickpocket Victim
Outa my way!
Dave watches the guy putting his wallet in his coat pocket.
The camera is following the boys
Dave
Garry
Garry
Yeah
Dave
That’s our mark
Garry
I can’t do this what if we get caught?
Dave
We won’t trust me just make sure you keep him distracted
The two boys move apart as Garry approaches the Mark
The camera cuts to Garry and the Gentleman talking
Garry
Excuse me
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Pickpocket Victim
Ye, wat dyou want?
Garry
Do you know what the time is?
The camera zooms out to show that Dave has caught up to where Garry is and as the Gentleman looks at his watch Dave takes his wallet out of his coat pocket.
Pickpocket Victim
It’s five past four
Garry
Thanks
Garry walks of looks over his shoulder to check the guy has walked on and then runs over to Dave.
Garry
What’s in it?!
Dave gets the wallet out of his pocket and opens the note section
Dave
There’s a tener and loads of random shit… better than nothing
Garry
True
Camera pans out
(Scene 6 Ends)
Scene 7
Cut:
INT. NOTTINGHAM – SHOP – AFTERNOON
The boys enter the shop and browse around
The radio is on in the background when the boys hear the lotto is up to 4 million
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
The camera can see the door and the cashier.
Dave
Did you hear that?!
Garry
Hear what?
Dave
On the radio, the lotto is at a 4mill jackpot!
Garry
Who actually spends money on that!?
Dave
I dunno but imagine having that much money! What would you do with it?
Garry
I would get an Xbox and a big TV! What about you?
Dave
I would buy a house and give some to charities.
They smile, pick up some stuff and go to the counter.
The camera cuts to showing them at the cash register.
They put the items on the side
Shop Keeper
Is that all?
Dave
Yeah, cheers
Shop Keeper
That’s 3 pounds 12 pence please
They hand her the 10 pound note and she gives them the change.
The camera fades out as they leave the shop
(Scene 7 Ends)
Scene 8
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREET – EVENING
The boys are sitting on the street with their jackets over them as blankets eating.
The camera fades into a wide shot of where they are sitting.
Garry
This is horrible!
Dave
At least we have some food.
Garry
Ye true.
A rude boy walks over.
Rude boy
Blud, u got any money?
Dave
Nah we aint got nufin
Rude boy
Empty your pockets
They empty their pockets and give the rude boy the rest of their money and walks off
Garry
Was that everything?
Dave
I don’t know
Dave gets the wallet out and goes through all the sections
Dave
There’s a lotto ticket for today’s draw and receipts
Garry
Should we check it tomorrow?
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Dave
We might aswell, even if we just win a 10er. I’m sorry I brought you with me but I really promise I will make this work.
Garry
No don’t be stupid, id much rather be with you than on my own back there.
Camera dips to black
(Scene 8 Ends)
Scene 9
Cut:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – SHOP – MORNING
The boys burst into the shop which causes the shop keeper to jump around.
The camera shows the door and the counter
As the boys approach the counter the camera changes to a closer shot of just the counter
Dave
Hi, can you check our ticket?
Dave hands over the lotto ticket. The shop keeper looks up the number and before she answers a large smile appears on her face.
Shop Keeper
You have won a million!
The boy’s faces light up as they look each other with a gob smacked stare. The shop keeper hands the tickets back to them
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Shop Keeper
You have to send off to claim the money thou.
Dave
Thanks!
The boys run off
The camera fades out
(Scene 9 Ends)
Scene 10
Fade in:
INT. NOTTINGHAM – HOUSE – DAY
The boys are sitting at the end of a bed playing an xbox on a 42” LCD with a computer in the background.
The camera shows the whole room.
Dave pauses the xbox and turns to Garry.
Dave
I told you it would all work out one day.
Garry turns to face Dave.
Garry
Yeah…
Garry looks around the room.
Garry
I guess you were right.
Script: Third Draft
Characters:
Older Brother: Dave (16)
Younger Brother: Garry (15)
Dad (38)
Shop Keeper (43)
Pick Pocket Victim (33)
Rude Boy (23)
Scene 1
Zoom out:
Int. – THE BROTHERS’ HOUSE – MORNING
The camera zooms out from a whiskey bottle to show Dave in the living room arguing with his Dad.
Dave
I can’t believe you forgot Garry’s Birthday again!
Camera changes to close up looking up towards the Dads Face as he slurs whilst trying to shout
Dad
Don’t you talk to me like that! I put the food on the table!
Camera switches to a close up of Dave’s face
Dave
No you don’t, your nothing! You’re a worthless alcoholic living on the dole!
Camera moves to a wide shot as the Dad fills with rage he dashes towards Dave and throws him to the floor and starts hitting him.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Garry runs into the room.
Garry
Stop Dad! Stop! I don’t care that you missed my birthday
At this the Dad flips out and turns his attention to Garry. The Dad picks up a knife. Tears start to form in Garry’s eyes.
Garry
Please….dad…please…don’t!
Meanwhile Dave has got up grabbed a pan and hits his dad with it.
Camera shows close up of Dave and Garry’s faces.
Dave
Come on Garry we have to get out of here!
Garry’s sobbing
Garry
Where..will..we..go?
Dave
I’m not too sure but anywhere is better than here.
Dave and Garry exit shot
Camera dips to black.
(Scene 1 Ends)
Scene 2
PAN :
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - GRAVEYARD - MORNING
At their mothers’ tombstone, Dave has his arm around Garry.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
The camera slowly pans in the whole grave yard to where Dave and Garry are standing, so you see the back of the grave that they are standing at and their top half of their body
Garry
I wish mum was still alive
Dave
Me too, you know I’m always there for you
Garry whimpering
Dave
Come on Garry it won’t always be this bad.
Garry looks at dave
Dave
I promise
Garry
When? You always say it that but when!?
Dave
Soon, I have a feeling but for now we have to try and get some money for food nd shit.
Camera zooms out.
Show a variety of quick shots of the two boys begging on the street and practicing to pick pocket.
(Scene 2 Ends)
Scene 3
ZOOM IN:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - PLAYGROUND - MIDDAY
The boys are sitting next to each other on two swings
It’s a grey day you can hear cars
The camera is facing them both sitting on the swings
Garry
What are we going to do? I’m hungry!
Dave
We have to just try and do it, just go for it!
Camera fades out.
(Scene 3 Ends)
Scene 4
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREETS – AFTERNOON
The boys are going to try and pick pocket someone.
Dave
I’m gonna go try on that guy.
Dave nods towards someone that has just used the cash point. The guy looks up as Dave brushes past him.
Dad
Dave?! Come back here!!
A chase begins
Show some fast shots of Dave being chased by his dad.
Fast exhilarating music
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Dave gets away.
Dad
What have I done?
(Scene 4 Ends)
Scene 5
ZOOM IN:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - PLAYGROUND - MIDDAY
The boys are sitting in the park again
It’s a grey day you can hear cars
Dave
Shit, I almost tryed to mug Dad. This is fucked up
Garry
Think of everything he has done to us.
Dave
Ye but he’s still our dad
Dave stands up and paces for a few seconds
Garry
Ye I know… but how are we gonna get money? How are we going to eat?
Dave
I’m trying to think, let me think for a minute.
Dave stands up and paces for a few seconds
Dave
I’ve got it
The camera zooms out as Dave explains the plan
(Scene 5 Ends)
Scene 6
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREETS – AFTERNOON
The boys are walking along the street when a man walks out of a shop
Pickpocket Victim
Fuck Off! I don’t owe you anything
The man pushes dave out the way.
Pickpocket Victim
Outa my way!
Dave watches the guy putting his wallet in his coat pocket.
The camera is following the boys
Dave
Garry
Garry
Yeah
Dave
That’s our mark
Garry
I can’t do this what if we get caught?
Dave
We won’t trust me just make sure you keep him distracted
The two boys move apart as Garry approaches the Mark
The camera cuts to Garry and the Gentleman talking
Garry
Excuse me
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Pickpocket Victim
Ye, wat dyou want?
Garry
Do you know what the time is?
The camera zooms out to show that Dave has caught up to where Garry is and as the Gentleman looks at his watch Dave takes his wallet out of his coat pocket.
Pickpocket Victim
It’s five past four
Garry
Thanks
Garry walks of looks over his shoulder to check the guy has walked on and then runs over to Dave.
Garry
What’s in it?!
Dave gets the wallet out of his pocket and opens the note section
Dave
There’s a tener and loads of random shit… better than nothing
Garry
True
Camera pans out
(Scene 6 Ends)
Scene 7
Cut:
INT. NOTTINGHAM – SHOP – AFTERNOON
The boys enter the shop and browse around
The radio is on in the background when the boys hear the lotto is up to 4 million
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
The camera can see the door and the cashier.
Dave
Did you hear that?!
Garry
Hear what?
Dave
On the radio, the lotto is at a 4mill jackpot!
Garry
Who actually spends money on that!?
Dave
I dunno but imagine having that much money! What would you do with it?
Garry
I would get an Xbox and a big TV! What about you?
Dave
I would buy a house and give some to charities.
They smile, pick up some stuff and go to the counter.
The camera cuts to showing them at the cash register.
They put the items on the side
Shop Keeper
Is that all?
Dave
Yeah, cheers
Shop Keeper
That’s 3 pounds 12 pence please
They hand her the 10 pound note and she gives them the change.
The camera fades out as they leave the shop
(Scene 7 Ends)
Scene 8
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREET – EVENING
The boys are sitting on the street with their jackets over them as blankets eating.
The camera fades into a wide shot of where they are sitting.
Garry
This is horrible!
Dave
At least we have some food.
Garry
Ye true.
A rude boy walks over.
Rude boy
Blud, u got any money?
Dave
Nah we aint got nufin
Rude boy
Empty your pockets
They empty their pockets and give the rude boy the rest of their money and walks off
Garry
Was that everything?
Dave
I don’t know
Dave gets the wallet out and goes through all the sections
Dave
There’s a lotto ticket for today’s draw and receipts
Garry
Should we check it tomorrow?
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Dave
We might aswell, even if we just win a 10er. I’m sorry I brought you with me but I really promise I will make this work.
Garry
No don’t be stupid, id much rather be with you than on my own back there.
Camera dips to black
(Scene 8 Ends)
Scene 9
Cut:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – SHOP – MORNING
The boys burst into the shop which causes the shop keeper to jump around.
The camera shows the door and the counter
As the boys approach the counter the camera changes to a closer shot of just the counter
Dave
Hi, can you check our ticket?
Dave hands over the lotto ticket. The shop keeper looks up the number and before she answers a large smile appears on her face.
Shop Keeper
You have won a million!
The boy’s faces light up as they look each other with a gob smacked stare. The shop keeper hands the tickets back to them
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Shop Keeper
You have to send off to claim the money thou.
Dave
Thanks!
The boys run off
The camera fades out
(Scene 9 Ends)
Scene 10
Fade in:
INT. NOTTINGHAM – HOUSE – DAY
The boys are sitting at the end of a bed playing an xbox on a 42” LCD with a computer in the background.
The camera shows the whole room.
Dave pauses the xbox and turns to Garry.
Dave
I told you it would all work out one day.
Garry turns to face Dave.
Garry
Yeah…
Garry looks around the room.
Garry
I guess you were right.
Feed Back from Chris Cook And Makiya
We read through my Script in class and then the main feedback i got was that the story unravels too easily and there are no problems that the characters of dave and garry have to over come. My girlfreind came up with the idea of a scene where the boys try to pick pocket their dad, and also a scene where they are robbed by a Rude Boy. I then took my script in again and we read through it and i got the following feedback:
Why would they aim to pickpocket an alcohoic/ messy guy as a pick pocket victim, put in a scene with the Pickpocket victim being a tool.
Why would they aim to pickpocket an alcohoic/ messy guy as a pick pocket victim, put in a scene with the Pickpocket victim being a tool.
Script1st Draft
“Leaving Home”
Script: First Draft
Characters:
Older Brother: Dave (16)
Younger Brother: Garry (15)
Dad (38)
Shop Keeper (43)
Pick pocket Victim (33)
Scene 1
Zoom out:
Int. – THE BROTHERS’ HOUSE – MORNING
The camera zooms out from a whiskey bottle to show Dave in the living room arguing with his Dad.
Dave
I can’t believe you forgot Garry’s Birthday again!
Camera changes to close up looking up towards the Dads Face as he slurs whilst trying to shout
Dad
Don’t you talk to me like that! I put the food on the table!
Camera switches to a close up of Dave’s face
Dave
No you don’t dad your nothing! You’re a worthless alcoholic living on the dole!
Camera moves to a wide shot as the Dad fills with rage he dashes towards Dave and throws him to the floor and starts hitting him.
Garry runs into the room.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Garry
Stop Dad! Stop! I don’t care that you missed my birthday
At this the Dad flips out and turns his attention to Garry. The Dad picks up a knife. Tears start to form in Garry’s eyes.
Garry
Please….dad…please…don’t!
Meanwhile Dave has got up grabbed a pan and hits his dad with it.
Camera shows close up of Dave and Garry’s faces.
Dave
Come on Garry we have to get out of here!
Garry’s sobbing
Garry
Where..will..we..go?
Dave
I’m not too sure but anywhere is better than here.
Dave and Garry exit shot
Camera dips to black.
(Scene 1 Ends)
Scene 2
PAN :
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - GRAVEYARD - MORNING
At their mothers’ tombstone, Dave has his arm around Garry.
The sun is out
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
The camera slowly pans in the whole grave yard to where Dave and Garry are standing, so you see the back of the grave that they are standing at and their top half of their body
Garry
I wish mum was still alive
Dave
Me too, but you know I will always be there for you
Garry whimpering
Dave
Come on Garry it won’t always be this bad I promise it will get better
Garry
When? You always say it will get better but when!?
Dave
Soon, I have a good feeling
Camera zooms out.
(Scene 2 Ends)
Scene 3
ZOOM IN:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - PLAYGROUND - Afternoon
The boys are sitting next to each other on two swings
The sun is out the birds are singing
The camera is facing them both sitting on the swings
Garry
So what are we going to do?
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Dave
I guess we have to try and get some money together somehow
Camera fades out.
Show a variety of quick shots of the two boys begging on the street and practicing to pick pocket.
Fast exhilarating music
(Scene 3 Ends)
Scene 4
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREETS – AFTERNOON
The boys are walking along the street and Dave see a man putting his wallet in his coat pocket.
The camera is following the boys
Dave
Garry you see the guy with the black coat on?
Garry
Yeah
Dave
That’s our mark, you know what to do
The two boys move apart as Garry approaches the Mark
The camera cuts to Garry and the Gentleman talking
Garry
Excuse me sir
Gentleman
Yes how can I help?
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Garry
Do you know what the time is?
The camera zooms out to show that Dave has caught up to where Garry is and as the Gentleman looks at his watch Dave takes his wallet out of his coat pocket.
Gentleman
It is five past four
Garry
Thank you
Garry walks of looks over his shoulder to check the guy has walked on and then runs over to Dave.
Garry
What’s in it?!
Dave gets the wallet out of his pocket and opens the note section
Dave
There’s at least 100 quid in here!!
Garry
Let’s go to the shop!
Dave
I told you things would get better.
Camera pans out
(Scene 4 Ends)
Scene 5
Cut:
INT. NOTTINGHAM – SHOP – AFTERNOON
The boys enter the shop and browse around
The radio is on in the background when the boys hear the lotto is up to 4 million
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
The camera can see the door and the cashier.
Dave
Did you hear that?!
Garry
Hear what?
Dave
The lotto is at a 4mill jackpot! Let me get you a lucky dip for your birthday!
Garry
Can I get some sweets?
Dave
Ye go for it
They pick up some bread milk ham cheese and sweets and go to the counter.
The camera cuts to showing them at the cash register.
They put the items on the side
Shop Keeper
Is that all?
Dave
No, can I have a lucky dip on the lotto for tonight?
Shop Keeper
No problem that is 7 pounds 12 pence please
They hand her a 10 pound note and she gives them the change.
The camera fades out as they leave the shop
(Scene 5 Ends)
Scene 6
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREET – EVENING
The boys are sitting on the street with their jackets over them as blankets.
The camera fades into a wide shot of where they are sitting.
Garry
Do you think we might win the lotto?
Dave
Yes I think we might just do, it’s about time things start going our way.
Garry
Ye me too, I really miss mum.
Garry starts sobbing
Garry
If she was here she would know what to do
Dave
Ye she would, she always did. I’m sorry I brought you with me but I really promise I will make this work.
Garry
No don’t be stupid, id much rather be with you than on my own back there.
Dave smiles at him
Camera dips to black
(Scene 6 Ends)
Scene 7
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREET – MORNING
The boys are sitting on the street as when they had gone to sleep, Dave wakes up and nudges Garry.
Dave
Wake up, wake up!
Garry moves slightly and opens an eye
Dave
Get up we can go check if we won anything!
Dave gets up and helps Garry get up then they run off
(Scene 7 Ends)
Scene 8
Cut:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – SHOP – MORNING
The boys burst into the shop which causes the shop keeper to jump around.
The camera shows the door and the counter
As the boys approach the counter the camera changes to a closer shot of just the counter
Dave
Hi, can you check our ticket?
Dave hands over the lotto ticket. The shop keeper looks up the number and before she answers a large smile appears on her face.
Shop Keeper
You have won a million!
The boy’s faces light up as they look each other with a gob smacked stare. The shop keeper hands the tickets back to them
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Shop Keeper
You have to send off to claim the money thou.
Dave
Thanks!
The boys run off
The camera fades out
(Scene 8 Ends)
Scene 9
Fade in:
INT. NOTTINGHAM – HOUSE – DAY
The boys are sitting at the end of a bed playing an xbox on a 42” LCD with a computer in the background.
The camera shows the whole room.
Dave pauses the xbox and turns to Garry.
Dave
I told you it would all work out one day.
Garry turns to face Dave.
Garry
Yeah…
Garry looks around the room.
Garry
I guess you were right.
Script: First Draft
Characters:
Older Brother: Dave (16)
Younger Brother: Garry (15)
Dad (38)
Shop Keeper (43)
Pick pocket Victim (33)
Scene 1
Zoom out:
Int. – THE BROTHERS’ HOUSE – MORNING
The camera zooms out from a whiskey bottle to show Dave in the living room arguing with his Dad.
Dave
I can’t believe you forgot Garry’s Birthday again!
Camera changes to close up looking up towards the Dads Face as he slurs whilst trying to shout
Dad
Don’t you talk to me like that! I put the food on the table!
Camera switches to a close up of Dave’s face
Dave
No you don’t dad your nothing! You’re a worthless alcoholic living on the dole!
Camera moves to a wide shot as the Dad fills with rage he dashes towards Dave and throws him to the floor and starts hitting him.
Garry runs into the room.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Garry
Stop Dad! Stop! I don’t care that you missed my birthday
At this the Dad flips out and turns his attention to Garry. The Dad picks up a knife. Tears start to form in Garry’s eyes.
Garry
Please….dad…please…don’t!
Meanwhile Dave has got up grabbed a pan and hits his dad with it.
Camera shows close up of Dave and Garry’s faces.
Dave
Come on Garry we have to get out of here!
Garry’s sobbing
Garry
Where..will..we..go?
Dave
I’m not too sure but anywhere is better than here.
Dave and Garry exit shot
Camera dips to black.
(Scene 1 Ends)
Scene 2
PAN :
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - GRAVEYARD - MORNING
At their mothers’ tombstone, Dave has his arm around Garry.
The sun is out
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
The camera slowly pans in the whole grave yard to where Dave and Garry are standing, so you see the back of the grave that they are standing at and their top half of their body
Garry
I wish mum was still alive
Dave
Me too, but you know I will always be there for you
Garry whimpering
Dave
Come on Garry it won’t always be this bad I promise it will get better
Garry
When? You always say it will get better but when!?
Dave
Soon, I have a good feeling
Camera zooms out.
(Scene 2 Ends)
Scene 3
ZOOM IN:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM - PLAYGROUND - Afternoon
The boys are sitting next to each other on two swings
The sun is out the birds are singing
The camera is facing them both sitting on the swings
Garry
So what are we going to do?
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Dave
I guess we have to try and get some money together somehow
Camera fades out.
Show a variety of quick shots of the two boys begging on the street and practicing to pick pocket.
Fast exhilarating music
(Scene 3 Ends)
Scene 4
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREETS – AFTERNOON
The boys are walking along the street and Dave see a man putting his wallet in his coat pocket.
The camera is following the boys
Dave
Garry you see the guy with the black coat on?
Garry
Yeah
Dave
That’s our mark, you know what to do
The two boys move apart as Garry approaches the Mark
The camera cuts to Garry and the Gentleman talking
Garry
Excuse me sir
Gentleman
Yes how can I help?
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Garry
Do you know what the time is?
The camera zooms out to show that Dave has caught up to where Garry is and as the Gentleman looks at his watch Dave takes his wallet out of his coat pocket.
Gentleman
It is five past four
Garry
Thank you
Garry walks of looks over his shoulder to check the guy has walked on and then runs over to Dave.
Garry
What’s in it?!
Dave gets the wallet out of his pocket and opens the note section
Dave
There’s at least 100 quid in here!!
Garry
Let’s go to the shop!
Dave
I told you things would get better.
Camera pans out
(Scene 4 Ends)
Scene 5
Cut:
INT. NOTTINGHAM – SHOP – AFTERNOON
The boys enter the shop and browse around
The radio is on in the background when the boys hear the lotto is up to 4 million
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
The camera can see the door and the cashier.
Dave
Did you hear that?!
Garry
Hear what?
Dave
The lotto is at a 4mill jackpot! Let me get you a lucky dip for your birthday!
Garry
Can I get some sweets?
Dave
Ye go for it
They pick up some bread milk ham cheese and sweets and go to the counter.
The camera cuts to showing them at the cash register.
They put the items on the side
Shop Keeper
Is that all?
Dave
No, can I have a lucky dip on the lotto for tonight?
Shop Keeper
No problem that is 7 pounds 12 pence please
They hand her a 10 pound note and she gives them the change.
The camera fades out as they leave the shop
(Scene 5 Ends)
Scene 6
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREET – EVENING
The boys are sitting on the street with their jackets over them as blankets.
The camera fades into a wide shot of where they are sitting.
Garry
Do you think we might win the lotto?
Dave
Yes I think we might just do, it’s about time things start going our way.
Garry
Ye me too, I really miss mum.
Garry starts sobbing
Garry
If she was here she would know what to do
Dave
Ye she would, she always did. I’m sorry I brought you with me but I really promise I will make this work.
Garry
No don’t be stupid, id much rather be with you than on my own back there.
Dave smiles at him
Camera dips to black
(Scene 6 Ends)
Scene 7
Fade in:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – STREET – MORNING
The boys are sitting on the street as when they had gone to sleep, Dave wakes up and nudges Garry.
Dave
Wake up, wake up!
Garry moves slightly and opens an eye
Dave
Get up we can go check if we won anything!
Dave gets up and helps Garry get up then they run off
(Scene 7 Ends)
Scene 8
Cut:
EXT. NOTTINGHAM – SHOP – MORNING
The boys burst into the shop which causes the shop keeper to jump around.
The camera shows the door and the counter
As the boys approach the counter the camera changes to a closer shot of just the counter
Dave
Hi, can you check our ticket?
Dave hands over the lotto ticket. The shop keeper looks up the number and before she answers a large smile appears on her face.
Shop Keeper
You have won a million!
The boy’s faces light up as they look each other with a gob smacked stare. The shop keeper hands the tickets back to them
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED:
Shop Keeper
You have to send off to claim the money thou.
Dave
Thanks!
The boys run off
The camera fades out
(Scene 8 Ends)
Scene 9
Fade in:
INT. NOTTINGHAM – HOUSE – DAY
The boys are sitting at the end of a bed playing an xbox on a 42” LCD with a computer in the background.
The camera shows the whole room.
Dave pauses the xbox and turns to Garry.
Dave
I told you it would all work out one day.
Garry turns to face Dave.
Garry
Yeah…
Garry looks around the room.
Garry
I guess you were right.
Charachter study
Dave: (16-17)
The older of the two brothers
Mature
Optimistic
Outgoing
Garry: (15)
The younger brother
Scared
Pesamistic
Smaller
Quite
Dad: (38-40)
Low life Alcoholic
beats his children
low self asteem
Shop Keeper: (40s)
Kind
Gentle
Caring
Pockpicket Victim (33)
Loud
Obnoxious
Self Centred
Rude Boy (20-24)
Sly
Doesn't care about any one else
The older of the two brothers
Mature
Optimistic
Outgoing
Garry: (15)
The younger brother
Scared
Pesamistic
Smaller
Quite
Dad: (38-40)
Low life Alcoholic
beats his children
low self asteem
Shop Keeper: (40s)
Kind
Gentle
Caring
Pockpicket Victim (33)
Loud
Obnoxious
Self Centred
Rude Boy (20-24)
Sly
Doesn't care about any one else
Leaving Home
Leaving Home is the story about two brothers Dave and Garry that have lived in fear of their alcoholic parents. On Garry’s 15th birthday they are pushed to the limit and are forced to leave home to a life on the streets. Dave and Garry wonder the streets begging and doing what they have to for money to afford the necessities. Dave the older brother is optimistic and tries to keep Garry in good spirits, whilst Garry is the more pessimistic and thinks nothing will ever get better. One day they go to get some food from the corner shop after having pick pocketed a guy and Dave hears on the radio that the lotto is at a 4 million roll over jackpot. After having all their money taken they realise they have a ticket, but is it a winning ticket?
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